Originally Posted by
CRaymond
Oy. This is a long time coming! Freelance, funerals and holidays are a lot.
ANYWAY This is a wonderful assembly, and like I said in private message, I have tons of questions.
Let's start with the title: I love the idea of Godsend, and it's a strong contender for a new superhero name.
And the last name Harbin, but you didn't even use the opportunity to make a Harbinger joke?
The notion of the Magic Mirror sounds REALLY FAMILIAR, but I love that you tied it to Daedalus and the siege of Troy. I LUUURVE the idea of interactions between mythological figures that weren't gathered in the Iliad or Odyssey.
My main criticism comes from story beats that feel very comicbooky. Like the idea that Aidia is corrupted, despite herself having a red flag mirrored name. Why not have her become Luicar, rather than Luicar become her? Amazons live in Paradise, but they need not be angels.
I like that Donna has memories and strife from her early life in Man's World, but I'm disappointed you chose to give her amnesia once she arrives on Themyscira. I think it's surprising that you situate her American family in Oregon. I'm a fan of moving the Wonder franchise to the west coast, though.
And at least you acknowledged that Donna sounds nearly exactly like Diana. And there wasn't a Troy Donna Hugh joke, but that one I don't blame you.