Page 9
Pan 1: The Detective face is pressed against glass distorting it
Detective: mmmmmmm
Pan 2: The Detective’s face backs away from the glass.
Detective: I’ll take a dozen jelly, a dozen glazed, and a single cream filled.
Pan 3: zoom out to find the Detective crouched down by the counter in a doughnut shop. The man, in his early 20’s with multiple facial piercings and long black hair, behind the counter begins to grab the doughnuts.
Man behind counter: That it?
Detective: yep
SFX near the Detective: deet-da-doo-dot-deet-deet
Pan 4: The Detective stands up while pulling out his cellphone.
Detective: Sorry, I need to take this.
Man behind counter: Whatever
Pan 5: The Detective holds the phone to his ear.
Detective: Detective Bishop.
Phone: Dammit Bishop! I told you to be at the station at 7! It is 7:15! Where the hell are you!?
Detective: I’m picking up the doughnuts Tony. Chill out. I’ll be there in a couple of minutes.
Phone: You were supposed to be here 15 minutes ago!
Detective: Thanks for doing the math for me Tony, you know how much trouble I have with that.
Pan 6: The man behind the counter holds out a white box towards The Detective.
Man behind counter: That will be $14.87 sir
Phone: just get your ass over here! *click*
Pan 7: The Detective puts his phone away while handing the man behind the counter the money.
Page 10
Pan 1: The Detective leaves the shop with the box under his right arm. in his left hand is a doughnut
Pan 2: The Detective begins to walk down the street while eating his doughnut, yellow cream oozes out of where he had taken a bite.
Pan 3: A man on a bicylce comes speeding down the sidewalk. a purse around his arm flutters behind him.
Man on bike: Outta the way! Move it!
Pan 4: headon shot of the man. behind him a woman lies on the ground.
Woman: He took my purse!
Pan 5: The man on the bike pasts the Detective
Detective: Hey stop!
Man on bike: @#&$ YOU!
Pan 6: The man on the bike turns around the corner of the doughnut shop
Man on the bike: GAH!
Page 11: Full page spread of Balfro in the air holding the man.
Page 12
Pan 1: Balfro flies over the Detective towards the woman.
Detective: Balfro...
Pan 2: Balfro lands by the woman, who is now standing, and drops the thief. People begin to crowd around them.
Balfro: I believe this is yours ma’am
Pan 3: The Detective shakes his head
Detective: I wouldn’t mind him so much if he wasn’t so damn corny.
Pan 4: Balfro hands the woman the purse.
Woman: Thank...thank you!
Balfro: Just doing my job
Pan 5: Close up of Balfro’s arm.
Woman: No, you don’t understand. Thank you...
Pan 6: close up of Balfro’s arm. the purse’s straps are now wrapped around it.
Woman: For holding onto the purse!
Page 13: Full page spread of the purse’s straps completely tangling Balfro.
Page 14
Pan 1: The man on the bike stands up.
Man on the bike: Worked like a charm Zoe!
Pan 2: Zoe puts her hand into her pocket
Zoe: Just as I said it would Tim
Pan 3: The detective drops the doughnut box and begins running towards them with his gun out
Pan 4: Zoe pulls a small black box out of her pocket.
Zoe: and now for the finale folks!
Page 15
Pan 1: a white light surrounds Zoe, Balfro, and Tim
Pan 2: The light grows brighter.
Pan 3: The Detective covers his eyes with his arm which is lit up by the light
Detective: Gah!
Pan 4: The light fills the panel
Pan 5: The detective with his arm covering his eyes is no longer lit up.
Pan 6: Balfro, Tim, and Zoe are gone
Page 16
Pan 1: Shot of Claire with a blanket around her sitting on a bench with her head down. the cameraman is sitting beside her, his arm is round her as he holds her close, cautiously watching her.
Claire: I...I’ve never...I just can’t...
Cameraman: ssshhh. It’s gonna be okay.
Claire: There was just so much blood...and the fur...guts...
Cameraman: It’s alright, it’s alright. Just take deep breaths, deep breaths.
Pan 2: Clarie looks up at the cameraman.
Claire: Do they...do they know what happened?
Cameraman: Don’t worry about that, it doesn’t matter right now.
Claire: Thanks for staying with me John. I really appreciate it. I-
John: Claire. There’s something you need to know.
Pan 3: John kisses Claire
Pan 4: John looks down into Claire’s eyes. They both are smiling.
Claire: John...
John: I’ve been your cameraman for four years now and ever since I met you I’ve been wanting to do that.
Pan 5: Claire kisses John
Pan 6: John and Claire smile at each other.
Claire: I just wish you had let me brush my teeth first
Page 17
Pan 1: Zoe stands above Balfro, who is strapped down on a gurney in a dark room. In her right hand is a small drill. The tip of the drill is a bright transparent orange.
Zoe: You see this Balfro?
Pan 2: close up of Zoe spinning the drill in front of her face.
Zoe: This is what is going to end you. What am I thinking? You can’t hear me!
Pan 3: Zoe slaps Balfro on the face
Zoe: WAKE UP DAMMIT!
Pan 4: Balfro opens his eyes.
Zoe: I want you awake for you death!
Pan 5: Balfro looks up Zoe
Balfro: Burn in hell!
Zoe: You little!
Pan 6: Zoe spits on Balfro
Page 18
Pan 1: Tim walks into the light.
Tim: Giving him a bath I see
Pan 2: Zoe motion Tim to come to her.
Zoe: He is a filthy little vermin isn’t he?
Pan 3: Tim puts his arm around Zoe’s waist and buries his head in her neck. around Tim’s waist is a pistol
Tim: he’s not the only dirty one in the room
Pan 4: Balfro stares at the gun on Tim’s waist.
Zoe: Tim, I told you already, our guest gets the first drilling.
Page 19
Pan 1: Balfro stares at the two in disgust
Tim: Ah yes, how is our little visitor?
Pan 2: Tim leaves Zoe side to examine Balfro better
Zoe: He was just about to get that cavity looked at.
Pan 3: Tim turns around to leave
Tim: Ah...Wait! Let me go the camera! This is something that needs to be replayed!
Pan 4: Zoe smiles
Zoe: Ah Tim, always the clever thinker.
Pan 5: Zoe turns towards Balfro. placing the drill by the strap on his arm.
Zoe: What do you think of him B?
Pan 6: Balfro glares at Zoe
Balfro: I think it works great. Scum always goes great with scum.
Page 20
Pan 1: Zoe gets on top of Balfro’s chest
Zoe: Are you saying you and I might be compatible?
Pan 2: Zoe leans her face close towards Balfro’s
Balfro: I’m saying that you two are like Bonnie and Clyde’s retarded gerbils.
Pan 3: Zoe smacks Balfro her hand knocking over the drill so it’s tip is on the strap
Zoe: You little @#$%&!
Pan 4: Balfro twists his hand around causing the strap to slowly be cut by the drill tip.
Balfro: hehehe
Zoe: You laugh now but just wait, we’ll see who is laughing then.
Pan 5: The strap breaks
Zoe: you see Tim and I have done research. You see, we found your weakness, grathik--
Pan 6: Balfro slams his fist into Zoe’s face.
Page 21: Full page spread of Balfro standing up free and pissed.
Page 22
Pan 1: Balfro punches Zoe in the neck
Zoe: Gahk!
Pan 2: Tim runs into the room with his pistol in one hand and a camera in the other
Tim: What the hell!?
Pan 3: Balfro grabs Tim’s pistol arm by the wrist.
Pan 4: Tim’s face in severe pain
SFX: CRACK!
Pan 5: Tim falls to the ground clutching his arm as Balfro takes his gun.
Balfro: I’ll be taking this
Pan 6: Zoe is on her knees clutching her neck. behind her Balfro puts the gun to her head.
Page 23: Full page spread of Zoe being shot in the head.
Cap 1: To Be Continued...