Yeah bro, Coates writing can be slow. He has a poetry with words that run pretty long. But it's still poetic and deep.
As for the story itself, I agree with previous posts, it was great to see things from Sharon's POV. When Selene had Sharon in her clutches, I thought that there would be the trope of Steve saving Sharon at the last minute. However, it quickly became apparent to me this is a Sharon focused story. Awesome to see her get of out these things mostly through her own ways (with Toni's help of course).
I'm glad to see Sharon turn young again. Now, let me contextualize that by saying I was fine with her being of an older age. We don't see many elderly women in comics, or in other media in general, playing a vital, active role (Yeah, there's Aunt May, but Aunt May doesn't really fight the bad guys, right). But Sharon's reasoning, her sense of loss, of unfairness, the audience really roots for her to get that youth back. So yes I think that was a good decision.
In any case, a short, but entertaining issue. Great job!